I don't really consider myself a writer but I wanted to practice using  Twine, so here goes!  I'm also not sure if this is finished or not, it can definitely be improved in a number of ways, but I wanted to submit something to  the Climate change game jam 2024  and don't have more time to work so I'll  use this as an opportunity to get input. 

  I would love to hear feedback  on both the writing and the format. What works and what doesn't?

Writing and art are all  by me, Kristofer "Kritzlof" Vaske.

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You're not entirely sure what awaits you, but you feel like the best thing to do must be to keep finding others that understand the gravity of the situation and want to act on it. That are prepared to fight for real change. There has to be ways to make people listen.

This is motivation. Very powerfull words.

That's very nice of you, thanks a lot!

I liked this a lot! Of all the ways climate change was tackled in this jam, this was the most nuanced and applicable discussion of climate change to the every day person. I appreciated the discussions of managing climate anxiety, navigating climate change is social situations, and how an individual person can contribute a voice to fight for a bigger change. 


The art was also very cute and added a lot here, this is a great little package that shows some potential as an education tool in the climate discussion.  :)

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Thanks a lot!  As I wrote in the the description I haven't really written many stories like this before and wasn't entirely sure about the tone and messaging. I  felt like maybe too much of my own frustrations about the topic   was shining through, haha.

Yeah,  I was short on time but I thought that it would probably be better with at least some  simple art to compliment the text.    I'm  very happy to hear you liked it :)